Saturday, May 27, 2006


Hey All!

M backkk with another creation after a loooong hibernation!! But not being too modest, I'd say this is one of my best ones (Thts coz I dnt hav too many good ones) :-)) This ones originated coz of an exceptional inspiration I got from nature itself...precisely the "SUN" which burns whole of the day & brightens up our lives by ever smiling down down upon us! The down side is tht I havnt been able to name it as yet...So if any one of u wld like to contribute towards tht, ur welcome...Thnx!Hope ul like it...


Look the Sun is setting,
as though marking its defeat.
Dying into the horizon,
after completing a brilliant feat!

It had been the cynosure,
an element of magnificent intensity.
But now as the vigor departs,
I look into the sky with pity.

Left back with a shaken spirit,
that I try hard to jostle against.
Groping away in the dark,
suddenly an ebbing light I sensed!

For just as I almost permitted,
myself to surrender.
It rose again with a glorious shine,
and a vibrant new energy to render.

At daybreak it gradually showed up,
however much the night tried to prolong.
With an incipient gleam that grows with time,
to play again its uninterrupted song.

(An alternative to the previous phara:-
At daybreak it gradually showed up,
reappearing in the far east.
With an incipient gleam that grows with time,
certainly to the eyes a feast!)

And even when it had set,
it sank with dignity and grace.
Creating a beautiful twilight,
amidst the subtle darkness to trace.

So yes the Sun sets,
but never to depart.
Only to rise again,
with prospects of a fresh new start!

It rises to the occasion,
of yet another day.
I’d sit and pray to God,
and I would hear God say.

It rises to the promise,
of yet another tomorrow.
It profusely shares its brilliant light,
so cheerful and free from sorrow.

Unvanquished it remains,
it teaches us never to frown.
It emerges from the darkest tunnels,
and then upon us it ever smiles down!



At 6:45 AM, Blogger HP said...

aahh..It is gr8 that I could finish the poem :-)

Really well written girl!!

Way to go!!


At 4:55 AM, Blogger Pri said...

Hey Hari...Even bfore t page refreshed I knew it wld b ur comment :-)) I must say Gr8 goin on ur commenting Hari...Its very motivating...I now wonder wat Abhi wld hav to say on this poem! :)Thnx! Tc...


At 5:43 AM, Blogger As If said...

Hey delete the comments I want mine to be the first :)).

Quite inpiring to say the least. Think you should take up poetry as full time.

At 8:25 AM, Blogger HP said...

Abhi rarely gets time from making some weird poems. So, I doubt he reads other ppl's blogs ..
But surely, you do give him some competition :-)
Keep posting more often..Love to see some creatively inclined among my friends..

The first comment is always mine. So the next time, just try to be a bit quick...


At 1:27 AM, Blogger mattu said...

I wish i cud be a poet too!
am sure it takes a lot to write this!
great going girl
keep it up n start getting em published
am serious :)

At 11:56 PM, Blogger Pri said...

Hey Shivi! Wats up? Published!! U kidding!! :-)) As for U, u mite not be a poet...but ur a gr8 writer urself! Neway thanx fr t encouragement! Take care!


At 3:24 AM, Blogger Snehal said...

No /**/

At 3:25 AM, Blogger Snehal said...

one word - mindblowing

Also nice rhyming scheme

At 11:26 PM, Blogger Pri said...

:-) Hey thanxx!!

At 9:12 PM, Blogger Abhi said...


"For just as I almost permitted,
myself to surrender.
It rose again with a glorious shine,
and a vibrant new energy to render."

The above lines .. cool !!!! gr8 stuff Ma'm :))

nd yes .. the rhyme stands up to the content of the poem :))

Keep gng Buddy !!!


At 2:18 AM, Blogger Pri said...

Thanx Abhi!

At 1:46 AM, Blogger shilpa said...

hey i want to suggest one name
"Rise and shine"

At 1:51 AM, Blogger Pri said...

:) Thnk u so much!!!

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